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Ahhh, she's so cute! The only things I'd say to change is add a banner at the top, like the one at the bottom, that says, "Seal of". Al...

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I'm gonna be inactive for the next week or so. DA is kind of getting in the way of my schoolwork and I'm behind in most of my classes. It's not permanent, though. I'll be back. *evil laughter*
I'm just kinda crouched in my bed, covering my face and trying not to make noise at how cute this was.

Leon is shorter than Mortas, which I definitely like. I kind of have a thing for height differences. I'm just in love with how you've written their relationship. It's realistic, and they sound like a couple who've been together for a long time.

You've also mentioned that Leon knows about Mortas'...thing.. that he has going on. Will we learn about when Leon found out about this? Did Mortas kill like this before he and Leon met? Were they together before Mortas started killing? I feel like at some point there should be a scene where Mortas flashes back to whatever the 'starting point' was, whatever that is. If I'm not making sense on this, please ask me to elaborate because I *really* want to explain this properly.

I can see that you've taken my suggestion of mention small, involuntary actions that happen when each reacts to the other.

Question: is Leon human? If he isn't, that could explain why he's so accepting of Mortas' thing. Also, is Mortas an assassin/mercenary? It sounds like he's getting paid for the kills he's made, so that's my assumption.

Sounds really good so far.

-Sochi
Ahhh, she's so cute! The only things I'd say to change is add a banner at the top, like the one at the bottom, that says, "Seal of". Also, the way the antlers are intersecting with her head (I guess it's a guy if it has antlers) is somewhat off. I'd move the back one up on his head so that it fits better with the angle of the head.

The first time I saw your one of your chibi things was when "Chibi Pinkie" showed up in my notifications. I definitely like your personal chibi style.. Giant ears with the fluff behind them is the thing I see as being uniquely yours.

Nerd approves.

-Sochi
There's a typo in the first sentence of the third paragraph. "Women" instead of "woman".

Just... wow. I thought this was going to go in an entirely different direction. At first it seemed really cute and fluffy. I had to reread the "I'm not in love with you" exchange three times before I realized that, yes, that's what she said (or signed).

"-and a voice that transmitted through her hands." This sentence is so well worded, so elegant. I'm not sure why I like it so much but I just really appreciate this sentence in particular. It prompts a mental image of her thoughts, beautiful silver strands of meaning, flowing from her mind to her hands, then being broadcast to whoever had the right frequency (aka whoever knew sign language).

:)

-Sochi

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bear48 Featured By Owner 4 days ago  Professional

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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner 4 days ago
omg I wasn't expecting that
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Shining-Scribe Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Hello there! Thank you very much for choosing to join :iconunseen-writers:. Feel free to submit your written works to our gallery and help yourself to sampling the works of other writers our gallery has to offer. A writing prompt, our theme of the week, is produced every Monday to help provide creative inspiration. I hope we'll be able to help you grow as a writer. Heart
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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2017
Thank you so much! I really do think being in this group and interacting with other writers is going to help me a lot.
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Shining-Scribe Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2017
Thank you!!!
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3wyl Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Let me know if you have any questions, suggestions, concerns or anything else! :D
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Ridy99 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
Thank you for watch)))
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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
you're welcome!! i saw your "draw the squad" thing... the base by mugges. I can just see it in my head. they start falling backwards, the bottom two are panicking, but the third doesn't notice until he is literally on the ground
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Ridy99 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2017
lol nice scene =D
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CreativeImaginative4 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome to DA!
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HaikyuuNerd Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2016
Thx

I hope I can figure everything out
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